What do you think of the first paragraph in the 4th chapter of my book?

That's actually very interesting. I think you have really good potential, that's what I personally think. You have a few extra editing processes of course, but who doesn't! Ha ha. It would probably make a little more sense knowing what the whole thing was about, ha ha again. But yeah, I'm giving my honest opinion. Nice description and everything. Very detailed. Maybe don't describe it as the 'black hummer' because you could always tell what it is later. Just maybe say something like: a black vehicle. Just an idea, you don't have to use it. Also, you should be careful putting it on here, because you never know what people would do. I promise I won't though, I have my own project to work on. I would like to read more, and, if you get it published, I would be delighted to see it on bookshelves. Hope I helped! :)